Sunday, November 21, 2010

I Killed Elizabeth: Chapter 23

I told him that I would be with him on his wedding day, did he not believe me? I was there and ready to kill. He denied me of my bride, why should he have his? The beautiful Elizabeth, she was so kindhearted and sweet. That was until of course I choked the life from her kind bones. He thought I came for his life and in fact I did. By taking life from her, I took his life as well. She was his last hope for happiness and with one movement of my gigantic hands I took it away from him completely. This game is only beginning. I can see his misery unfolding. I have witnessed hi rage of madness. How easily the human mind is destroyed of all commonsense.
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  1. Brittney NolandNovember 21, 2010 at 6:38 PM

    I like how sinister you make him seem. Very nice. This was giving me chills. Good job, but check the spelling..hi instead of his. Not trying to be nitpicky, that just threw me off a bit.

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  2. JazrealNovember 22, 2010 at 4:20 PM

    Julieth, this is great! I like how you related the way you brought up the fact that he is taking life away from Victor without actually putting a hand on him! I was trying to explain to my class today, but I don't think they were getting it! X]]

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  3. -alexNovember 22, 2010 at 8:00 PM

    I like this right here because you show the monster is killing him from the inside out by getting to the ones nearest and dearest to his heart, but maybe a little more details on how he killed her and his emotions during his actions.

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